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September 8, 2017

In Chapter 4 we learned about giving information but with organization. For better organization you can use list, columns, bullet lists, numbered list, and paragraph headings. Examples: 

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Numbered List-

Instead of this:

To clean the printer, you should do the following. First, you should disconnect the power cord. Then you open the front cover, and the printer area should be cleaned with a soft cloth.

Try this:

To clean the printer, do the following:

1. Disconnect the power cord.

2. Open the front cover.

3. Clean the printer with a soft cloth. 

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Column Headings-

Instead of this:

On April 3 we will be in Toledo, and the speaker is Troy Lee. On May 20 we will be in Detroit, and the speaker is Sue Wu.

Try this:

Date             City             Speaker

April 3       Toledo          Troy Lee

May 20       Detroit          Sue Wu

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Paragraph Headings-

Instead of this:

The next topic is vacations. A new vacation schedule will be available on May 1. To assist employees, we will begin a flex schedule in the fall.

Try this:

Vacations. A new vacation schedule will be available on May 1.

Flextime. To assist employees, we will begin a flex schedule in the fall.

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September 6, 2017

We talked about proofreading and revisions in class. Revisions includes improving content and structure. May involve adding, cutting, and recasting. Proofreading is correcting grammar, spelling, punctuation, format, and mechanics. it is very important to revise and proofread any e-mail, text message, memos, or any kind of message before sending them to someone. Specially if e-mails and memos will be heading over to employees or co-workers. Also, when revising a message make sure to check for “flabby expressions”. This will take some effort, but it is important to trim your sentences.(Pag.83) Example: instead of saying…

Flabby                                                    Concise

as a general rule           …say…             generally

at a later date              …say…                later

at this point in  time    …say…            now, presently    

Often flabby phrases can be reduced to a single word. 

I just want to say that things in the research team are moving along good. I feel blessed to be on such a great team.  I am really glad that we are given a chance to catch up on our assignments, I have 4,5, to do, so thats what I’m doing this weekend. Once again I am blessed, and a big shoutout to Wanda, she helped me to consolidate my homework. Have a great weekend everyone.

August 28, 2017

On August 28th we learned about familiar how to use familiar vocabulary in a unprofessional, conversational and formal way.

Examples:

Unprofessional= Incorrect grammar, unpredictable sentence structure, inappropriate punctuation, slang, vulgarisms.

 Conversational= Correct grammar and punctuation, conversational tone, simple sentence structure, familiar words.

Formal= Correct grammar, serious tone, complex sentence structure, polysyllabic words.

August 30, 2017

For our first quiz I got two questions wrong, number five and number seven.

Number five was:

Beginning writers often neglect the last phase of revising their documents for clarity, conciseness, tone, and readability. However, the best business messages require extensive work in the revising phase to be certain the document best meets the audience’s needs and the purpose of the message. Experts recommend that approximately 50 percent of a writer’s time should be spent in this final phase. This one was TRUE. 

Number seven was: 

Of the options below, “Our new telecommuting program will begin on August 1” is the most direct opening. The others are more indirect because they provide background information.

a. A number of employees have asked about telecommuting options.
b. Many businesses have been implementing telecommuting programs, and we have studied their programs extensively.
c. Rising gas prices have led many companies to allow telecommuting, and we think this might be a good idea for our company.
d. Our new telecommuting program will begin on August 1.

Number seven was TRUE as well. 

 

 

 

 

Preliminary Ground Work Memo

Date: October 24, 2017

To: Professor Lance Uyeda

From: TEAM 4: Alyha, Chad, Shelia, Spencer, Wanda

Subject: Ground Work Memo

Overview: The purpose of this project is to hopefully persuade U. S. Representative David P. Roe (R-Tennessee District I) https://roe.house.gov/ to make changes that will improve the current GI Bill and alleviate some of the problems recipients currently encounter or have faced. We divided the project into three subtopics: Wanda and Spencer will be researching the history of GI Bill. Shelia will be relating her experience as a dependent spouse. Chad will be sharing his personal experience as a recipient and the problems he faces. Alyha will be researching the future of the GI Bill and its effects on future veterans/reservists.

 Preliminary Research: Congresswoman Tulsi Gabbard is a U.S politician and Army Veteran. She is an excellent source because she served in the military and represents the 2^nd Congressional District of Hawaii. She can be contacted at TulsiOffice@mail.house.gov (808) 541-1986. Karen Puu works at Windward Community College VA Office as a coordinator on behalf of student veterans and can be contacted at kpuu@hawaii.edu  or (808) 235-7431. She is an expert on veteran affairs and oversees WCC’s  student veteran’s program.

Cited Sources:

“US Department of Veteran Affairs.”www.va.gov.

“ACE Report Shows Early Results of Post-9/11 GI Bill.” Presidency, vol. 14, no. 2, Spring/Summer 2011, pp.40-41.

“Vietnam Veterans and the GI Bill.” Washington Post, 19, July,1997.

EBenefits Fact Sheet – dol.Gov. www.bing.com/cr?IG=7EDBA1D9218F4D09946F80318DC544BA&CID=32465C2AC68E6D2

F2D6F570DC7886C5F&rd=1&h=NdIEy5gGJMo_qvo8mbjZXRsRxcuIHDHaSnRf15BnFjI&v=1&r=https%3a%2f%2fwww.dol.gov%2fvets%2fVMS%2fVPLs%2feBenefits-factsheet.pdf&p=DevEx,5043.1.

University, Saint Leo. “Military-Friendly Top 10 School | Saint Leo University Online.” Blog,

info.online.saintleo.edu/military-friendly?campaign=&adgroup=&keyword=%2Bgi%2B%2Bbill&matctype=b&network=s&device=c&GA_loc_physical_ms=9032766&gclid=EAIaIQobChMI_ePWzZWN1wI  VBQ1pCh0Miws2EAAYAiAAEgJAefD_BwE.

STEWART, PEARL. “Veteran Dilemma.” Diverse: Issues in Higher Education, vol. 31, no. 20,

06Nov.2014,pp.8-10.EBSCOhost,wccproxy.lib.hawaii.edu:2048/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=99287009.

Jensen, Ron. “Cuts to GI Bill Benefits Come under More Fire.” National Guard, vol. 70, no. 4, Apr.2016,p.15.EBSCOhostm,wccproxy.lib.hawaii.edu:2048/login? url=https://search.ebsco host.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=115057663.

United States, Congress, House-Veterans Affairs; Armed Forces. H.R. 3218. www.congress.gov,

https://www.congress.gov/bill/115th-congress/house-bill/3218, (2017-2018).

Things to Know About the “Forever GI Bill”: A Section by Section Analysis of this

Groundbreaking Legislation. www.studentveterans.org, Student Veterans of America, Aug 2017,   nvest.studentveterans.org/wp-content/uploads/Things-to-Know-About-the-Forever-GI-Bill_SVA-1

 

Preliminary Ground Work Memo

Date: October 24, 2017

To: Professor Lance Uyeda

From: TEAM 4: Alyha, Chad, Shelia, Spencer, Wanda

Subject: Ground Work Memo

Overview: The purpose of this project is to hopefully persuade U. S. Representative David P. Roe (R-Tennessee District I) https://roe.house.gov/ to make changes that will improve the current GI Bill and alleviate some of the problems recipients currently encounter or have faced. We divided the project into three subtopics: Wanda and Spencer will be researching the history of GI Bill. Shelia will be relating her experience as a dependent spouse. Chad will be sharing his personal experience as a recipient and the problems he faces. Alyha will be researching the future of the GI Bill and its effects on future veterans/reservists.

Preliminary Research: Congresswoman Tulsi Gabbard is a U.S politician and Army Veteran. She is an excellent source because she served in the military and represents the 2nd Congressional District of Hawaii. She can be contacted at TulsiOffice@mail.house.gov (808) 541-1986. Karen Puu works at Windward Community College VA Office as a coordinator on behalf of student veterans and can be contacted at kpuu@hawaii.edu  or (808) 235-7431. She is an expert on veteran affairs and oversees WCC’s  student veteran’s program.

Cited Sources:

“US Department of Veteran Affairs.” http://www.va.gov.

“ACE Report Shows Early Results of Post-9/11 GI Bill.” Presidency, vol. 14, no. 2, Spring/Summer 2011, pp.40-41.

“Vietnam Veterans and the GI Bill.” Washington Post, 19, July,1997.

EBenefits Fact Sheet – dol.Gov. www.bing.com/cr?IG=7EDBA1D9218F4D09946F80318DC544BA&CID=32465C2AC68E6D2F2D6F570DC7886C5F&rd=1&h=NdIEy5gGJMo_qvo8mbjZXRsRxcuIHDHaSnRf15BnFjI&v=1&r=https%3a%2f%2fwww.dol.gov%2fvets%2fVMS%2fVPLs%2feBenefits-factsheet.pdf&p=DevEx,5043.1.

University, Saint Leo. “Military-Friendly Top 10 School | Saint Leo University Online.” Blog, info.online.saintleo.edu/military-friendly?campaign=&adgroup=&keyword=%2Bgi%2B%2Bbill&matctype=b&network=s&device=c&GA_loc_physical_ms=9032766&gclid=EAIaIQobChMI_ePWzZWN1wI  VBQ1pCh0Miws2EAAYAiAAEgJAefD_BwE.

STEWART, PEARL. “Veteran Dilemma.” Diverse: Issues in Higher Education, vol. 31, no. 20, 06Nov.2014,pp.8-10.EBSCOhost,wccproxy.lib.hawaii.edu:2048/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=99287009.  

Jensen, Ron. “Cuts to GI Bill Benefits Come under More Fire.” National Guard, vol. 70, no. 4, Apr.2016,p.15.EBSCOhostm,wccproxy.lib.hawaii.edu:2048/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=115057663.

United States, Congress, House-Veterans Affairs; Armed Forces. H.R. 3218. www.congress.gov, https://www.congress.gov/bill/115th-congress/house-bill/3218, (2017-2018).

Things to Know About the “Forever GI Bill”: A Section by Section Analysis of this  Groundbreaking Legislation. www.studentveterans.org, Student Veterans of America, Aug 2017,   nvest.studentveterans.org/wp-content/uploads/Things-to-Know-About-the-Forever-GI-Bill_SVA-1

 

Preliminary Ground Work Memo

Date October 24, 2017

To: Professor Lance Uyeda

From: TEAM 4: Alyha, Chad, Shelia, Spencer, Wanda.

Subject: Ground Work Memo

Overview: The purpose of this project is to hopefully persuade Rep. David Roe to make changes that will improve the current GI Bill and alleviate some of the problems recipients currently or have faced. We divided the project into three subtopics. Wanda and Spencer will be researching the history of GI Bill. Shelia will be sharing her experience as a Dependent. Chad will be sharing his experience as a recipient and the problems he faces. Alyha will be researching the future of the GI Bill and its effects on future veterans/reservists.

Preliminary Research: Congresswoman Tulsi Gabbard is a U.S politician and Army Veteran. She is an expert source because she served in the military and represents the 2nd Congressional District of Hawaii. She can be contacted at TulsiOffice@mail.house.gov, (808) 541-1986. Karen Puu works at WCC VA Office as a coordinator on behalf of student veterans and can be contacted at (808) 235-7431. She is also an excellent source because she oversees the veteran’s programs at WCC.

Sources:

“US Department of Veteran Affairs.” http://www.va.gov.

“ACE Report Shows Early Results of Post-9/11 GI Bill.” Presidency, vol. 14, no. 2, Spring/Summer2011, pp.40-41.

“Vietnam Veterans and the GI Bill.” Washington Post, 19, July,1997.

EBenefits Fact Sheet – dol.Gov. http://www.bing.com/cr?IG=7EDBA1D9218F4D09946F80318DC544BA&CID=32465C2AC68E6D2F2D6F570DC7886C5F&rd=1&h=NdIEy5gGJMo_qvo8mbjZXRsRxcuIHDHaSnRf15BnFjI&v=1&r=https%3a%2f%2fwww.dol.gov%2fvets%2fVMS%2fVPLs%2feBenefits-factsheet.pdf&p=DevEx,5043.1.

University, Saint Leo. “Military-Friendly Top 10 School | Saint Leo University Online.” Blog,               info.online.saintleo.edu/military-friendly?campaign=&adgroup=&keyword=%2Bgi%2B%2Bbill&matc type=b&network=s&device=c&GA_loc_physical_ms=9032766&gclid=EAIaIQobChMI_ePWzZWN1wI  VBQ1pCh0Miws2EAAYAiAAEgJAefD_BwE.

STEWART, PEARL. “Veteran Dilemma.” Diverse: Issues in Higher Education, vol. 31, no. 20, 06Nov. 2014,pp.8-10.EBSCOhost,wccproxy.lib.hawaii.edu:2048/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=99287009.

Jensen, Ron. “Cuts to GI Bill Benefits Come under More Fire.” National Guard, vol. 70, no. 4, Apr.2016,p.15.EBSCOhostm,wccproxy.lib.hawaii.edu:2048/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=115057663.

 

PWC 9: Message Analysis

Date: October 24, 2017

To: wcc-students@hawaii.edu

From: kkahumok@hawaii.edu

Subject: Effective Persuasive Messages

 

Aloha Incoming ENG 209 Students,

 

I am pleased to help future students in understanding principles of writing persuasive messages by examining the above-average, average, and below-average examples of the same message.  The major lessons about writing persuasive messages that are most important to remember is that it is an honorable and ethical form of communication. It is the act of motivating an audience to change a belief, attitude, or behavior and does not involve manipulation, trickery, or coercion. Those who master the skill of persuasion become change agents and leaders.

 

The samples that were given are to help guide you in what persuasive messages are and to help expose you to what builds a strong persuasive message versus a weak one. Example one is the most effective because it gives a various amount of detailed information.

• The opening gains attention and interest that relates to the reader by the company showing its employees appreciation and suggesting to them the benefits if they choose to participate in the health-assessment.
• The body builds interest by explaining logically and concisely the purpose of the request. It used facts, statistics, expert opinions, examples, and specific details as well as focuses on the reader’s direct and indirect benefits. It reduces resistance by anticipating objections, offering counterarguments, establishes credibility, demonstrates competence, and showing the value of the proposal.
• The closing provides a deadline and a final motivated benefit to action. It also shows courtesy, respect, gratitude, and professionalism.

Persuasion is your golden ticket to promotion. Master communicators feel in control of challenging situations because they understand the art of persuasion and they know how to recognize and use persuasive strategies.

 

I would like to recommend everyone to please attend two of our free workshops in using effective persuasive messages in improving on your persuasive skills. The workshops will be located in the WCC Library in room 102. They are offering these workshops October 25-27 (Wed.-Fri.) and November 1 (Wed.) from 9-10am, 12-1pm, and 3-4pm. Please contact Mary to sign-up for these workshops via e-mail: marycb@hawaii.edu or (808)999-7788 ext. 575 or go to room 102 at WCC library to schedule in person. Any other questions or concerns, please email your inquiries to: xxxxxx@hawaii.edu

 

Mahalo,

 

Kellie-Ann Kahumoku

Windward Community College Student

kkahumok@hawaii.edu

I really messed up on the recipient/sender idea and went too fast through the test leading to the question about whether the status or credentials of the sender were important being confused and wrong.