Month: August 2017

 

The Chicken Email’s

Chickens on Campus

• Insert a general greeting to the audience (e.g. Hello everyone, I hope you are enjoying the semester thus far.)
• Some sort of introduction as to who I am
• Lessen the formality. I would reword the opening line to: I’ve received a distressing report of a chicken acting aggressively towards a faculty member/student on campus.
• Change the fourth line so it does not appear to be a threat/warning (e.g. As a reminder, please do not feed feral chickens on campus as it may encourage the animals to approach people which may lead to an increase of these attacks.)
• The closing line is also very ominous and gives the impression that the writer will make the decision to remove the chickens. This line gives the impression that the composer of this email is a heartless individual. To give a more positive outlook on this statement, I would restate it as: Unfortunately, if these attacks continue, liability requirements may force the removal of the chickens.
• In my opinion, the outcome of the letter as written would be a general dislike of the composer because it has a dictator-esque connotation. The outcomes I would like to achieve in an email on this subject would be: a general understanding of why someone shouldn’t feed the chickens, any other incidents to be reported, give the impression that the chickens are a welcomed part of our campus, but there needs to be some control, let the readers know that removal of the chickens is a last resort, and if they follow our guidelines, shouldn’t be necessary.
• Communication problems: possible deluge of emails regarding chicken attacks, no emails regarding attacks because the readers are afraid of the repercussions for the chickens
• The only desirable elements to this email, in particular, are: informative (informs the staff that there have been incidents of chicken attacks), it provides a way to report such incidents, advises the staff to refrain from feeding the chickens

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I would like to start by saying how much I enjoy the class, and I am looking forward to learning all about how to write in a business manner.  In the class I have already worked with some of the people in the class on the tower project, it was fun and interesting. I look forward to meeting and working with all my new classmates.  My name is Joe.  I really enjoy music.

I really enjoyed my first day of class and getting to know Professor Uyeda and each of you!  I’m looking forward to a great semester, many successful writing assignments and group activities.

Let’s talk about my first impressions of English 209. I was a bit anxious knowing that it’s an intensive writing class. The first day of class was just the basics, going over the syllabus and doing a group activity to work on communicating with people we don’t know. But I’m sure it’s going to get more intense throughout the rest of the semester. I’m willing to put my time in to learn the knowledge of Business Writing with the rest of you!

The first day of class was very interesting, it began just like every other class does on the first day. That is everyone introduces themselves to each other to somewhat get an idea for their new classmates. What I did not expect was to put our communication skills to test the very first day in the tower building activity. All of the groups were given twenty pieces of raw spaghetti noodles, a specific length of tape and one marsh mellow and the goal was to build the highest standing tower with the marsh mellow at the top of the tower. The tower had to stay standing for at least ten seconds. The activity itself was fun, but not knowing anyone in the class and trying to find a group was difficult for myself and some others. Once I found a group and we started on the activity it was a huge relief. Being a competitor, it made me forget about the stress and awkwardness I had before we began the activity. In the end, the first day of class was interesting, but a win/win for myself. My group won the activity and I got to know 3 others a little more than the rest of the class while working on communication skills.

I chose this exercise to do because I thought it would identify whether I have excellent or deficient listening skills. Because I purchased a used book from Chegg.com, I was not able to do the quiz without the access code. The task was to identify two listening behaviors that I need to work on the most.

I  been told that I have selective hearing, but, I disagree. My hearing is excellent and I can multi-listen as well as multi-task. The definition of hearing is the ability to perceive sound and listening means hearing with attention to sound. Two behaviors I need to work on are: 1) interpreting what was communicated correctly and 2) being able to relay the information verbatim.

What’s up guys? I see most of you have this down so bare with me for I do not. I am not sure what to write about either, so comments and pointers would be appreciated.

So far I like the direction this class is headed, the teacher and the students seem friendly and eager to teach and learn from one another. I am looking forward to our group projects we have this semester. After the first two days of class I can see there will be a lot of group work and collaboration between students to accomplish our set goals. The teacher seems down to earth and invested in his students and I am excited to see what I can absorb from him this semester.

A little about me, my name is Corey Weaver Im 27 and in college to work towards my way to med school. After this semester I will have obtained my associated in biology, then I will attend Mano for my bachelors.

Summertime is great when you live in Hawaii.